Thank you so much! I never mind concrit. I happen to disagree in this case; I view childhood speech patterns as quite different from accents. As a reader, I find it distracting when a small child speaks using perfect English. It does become a problem if there's quite a bit of dialogue, but here, with just a handful of words, it made more sense to write them as spoken. :)
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Date: 2010-03-26 03:16 pm (UTC)