Great story without being melodramatic, I really enjoyed it. The only criticism I would have (as a writing teacher) is that it would be better to write Ethan's dialogue as normal while describing his lisp or way of speaking. This is also how accents should be handled. The weird looking words tend to be too distracting in a story. Hope you don't mind the concrit, and again I loved the story. Definitely one I would revisit. CLC
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Date: 2010-03-25 05:16 am (UTC)